John Byrne's Hawkman page3

Yeah, that changes a lot of the critique. Sorry. I would have looked closer at the line quality and the values of dark and light better. Where, I am not as good at inking so I will just go with what I see. Now, take in mind, I am not a good inker and I do not pretend to know special techniques and such. This is only what my eye is picking up that is telling me it needs to have something different done to it. Here I go.

Panel one, from what I am looking at is that the line quality is too consistent and there is no thinning of the line from the man who I think is farther away then the vampire. They both look like they are on the same plane and we are taking a side shot at them. If this is what you were going for, spot on. If you were trying to establish depth between the two characters then thicking the outside edge of the vampire and thinning the mans outside edge would help a bit with that look. The lines of are over rendered on the face and hands. There was no distinction between the lines besides length on the interior of the face and hands. they have the same width as the outside lines and the amount of lines dirties the picture. Feathering is a technique that varies from artist to artist so .this maybe your look. The line quality looks all the same in feel. Straight lines, no flowing organic lines that add to the flow of blood out of the hand or the nature sway of the hair. More following of the form will take some of the flatting of the image that occurred. Panel two suffers from the same thing. The line work is too consistent in width. It gives not sense of depth at all. Also, the hard outline on the shadow behind the vampires arms flatten it out as well and the character loses the hands and forearm infront of the body feel to it. The background has a lot of organic lines to man made structures. These should be ruled so they look manufactured. the wiggle in the line though,I think you did it intentional, makes it look unfinished as opposed to in the background of the characters. If you made the lines sharp yet thin and slightly thicken the characters lines then you will get that depth back. Also you will get the feel of manufactured verse grown (organic) items, jackets, clothes, brick, steel. Your spotting of the blacks is decent in the second panel. I don't know where I would add more or less to it. In panel three it is the same problem yet you have the line weight reversed as to what it needs to be. Closer objects have thicker lines, farther objects thinner lines. Thicken the vampire cause he is right in our face. Thin out Hawkman because he is behind the Vampire wacking him but good. It is ok to have the vampires coat almost all solid black with the white crease lines in it. It will present a solid image verses the half and half one you have on the vampire now. Panel four. You have a bit of the line weight working in this panel with Hawkmans outline. The lines on the vampires face are way too much. He just got smashed with a mace, making shadow lines will not cover not trying to deform the nose or adding blood to it. The hand in the corner opposite of Hawkman is just to many lines not doing nothing. Give it form and make it a hand or just not include it. Too distracting. Panel five. Way too loose with the line work. Get used to making ruled lines on spare paper and try using different tools. Nibs or even markers will help if the brush is too loose for you. Sometimes using a smaller sized brush , 01 or a 00 or 000 will help if the brush is too thick it can be hard to control thin lines. Try to interpreate more from the layouts then you are. Lines from pencils are there as guides. If they are loose, breakdowns , as opposed to tight (finishes) pencils then the inker is to look at the overall image and draw it. Work on making your forms just that, having form. Not just following the lines and not drawing the conclusions that need to be finished on the page.
Overall, you are keeping the feel of the page there. It looks like Byrnes work. That is a plus that you are following his lines and have seen the overall picture. This is why I consider myself poor at inking. Not because I don't know what to do. I just don't practice enough to do it right. You are working well with the medium. Doing things like thick ink lines over what is a window in a wall is not good and disrupts the image on the page. This was done on the last panel.
Keep up the challenging work! that page was not easy to pull off. The things I mentioned are minor tweaks and nothing to be worked up about. Practice will take care of that.
Hope this wasn't too long.